Ohio Impromptu

Might I suggest The Perks of Being A Wallflower by Stephen Chbosky? Certainly the best book in the genre you're describing that I ever read.

So, nearly one year after chapter one was completed, here is chapter three. I will be accepting my crown as Least Productive Young Writer in the days to come. Enjoy. ...

I've been struggling with chapter two for, well, since I posted chapter one. I was trying to think of a way to expand it and make it contribute more to ...

The main character was well-drawn, and his emotions were conveyed vividly, but the plot was virtually non-existent. Seriously, where is the writing? Let me know when there is something here ...

Two “Do you feel like you want to go somewhere else?” the Trigger asks me. I decide that I should talk to him a bit more. It’s what they want, ...

Thanks for the input, Claudette. I must admit that this chapter is a rough draft thrown together in a few hours, so I apologize for any shortcomings. I'll definitely go ...

Thankyou tremendously for the feedback. I agree with most of what you pointed out, so I'll fix those things up in a minute. As for the Rogues: yes, they are ...

Much better. :wink:

I'm in the process of extending this at the moment and the flashback will be posted tommorow night some time. Right now I just want to see if anyone else ...

Lightning* Alcohol* Anyway, I liked this a lot. You drew the characters really well and placed them in the story perfectly. I don't really have much to say except for ...

If I had any idea what was going on here I'd still be confused. I don't, so I'll just pretend that I totally agree with everything and that this piece ...

I love your use of noun compounds. 'Heart rate suicide' was a personal favourite. I also like the way you ended it. No better end than a goodnight. As always, ...

Thanks all. I do appreciate the mercilessness. Any more thoughts?

Secretly, eh? 8)

Congratulations* With a T. Anyway, it seems pretty good at the moment, but I think it needs that extra something to make it stand out. I really hope you make ...